1) The Pitch
2)
Reflection
In my feedback, people said I had better light this time so I
tried to continue with that. Tess also suggested that I wear a blazer to seem
more professional. Although I tried to become more confident with my pitch,
Cristian said that by maybe memorizing more of it, it could help me from
looking at notes. I agree with this. I showed this video to one of my friends
and she said maybe I should talk about who this can help and this stood out to
me as I should try and seem more credible by using statistics but also saying
who it can help to address my market.
3)
What did you change?
I tried to practice my pitch more and found that I could
memorize the start of it pretty well but still had to use prompts for the end
of it. I think that it was true what Cristian said, that the parts I knew
seemed more genuine. I do not have a blazer like Tess suggested, but I tried to
dress up more, and try and control my hair, so I could seem more professional. I
included a statistic and also that it could help anyone with a busy lifestyle as my friend
suggested.
This is great. The lighting does help make it seem more comfortable for the viewer. It also is great that you memorized your pitch. I know how difficult it can be and I give you props for that. By looking into the camera, the things you say do indeed sound more genuine. As usual, the statistic is great and definitely gives you a sort of backing that instills more concrete in your pitch.
ReplyDeleteI think that you did a great job with memorizing your pitch. A lot of mine was relatively improv after looking at a couple notes and re-watching my old takes. However, I think that if I would have memorized where I wanted to take each shift of the pitch I think it would have made the whole thing more fluid and I would have been able to speak way more clearly, like you were able to do.
ReplyDeleteHi Georgia,
ReplyDeletePerfection! You've got it down so that it sounds fluid but not robotic. Introducing your problem, adding that extra statistic, and dressing up more enhances your service idea. I also think it's really effective that you say EasyPay multiple times in your pitch because it becomes a familiar and memorable name in the listeners' mind. Great job!
Tess